1) In our society, most people believe that killing another person is wrong. There are certain circumstances, however, when we agree that it's "less wrong." In "Say You're One of Them," Monique's father kills Maman in order to save his children. Is this killing an example of a time when the "killing is wrong" rule might be bent? Why or Why not? Can Monique's father's actions even be considered a choice?
moniques father didnt kill for no reason he wanted to protect his children at all cost even if he had to kill someone so he wasent wrong but if he had another way to avoid the situation then he should of did it but if he had no choice then he wouldnt be wrong. its not like he was goin around killing people for no reason which is bad and people like that should be punnished and put to jail for an example a person in the army wants to protect his nation so he would have to kill people to protect his or her nation they kno its wrong but its to benefit and protect there nation so they do what they got to do. an example thats opposite from this is a random person killling people from highschool because he or her dosent like them which is wrong and this not a real reason to kill and the rule shouldnt be bent for people like this.
Topic sentence: 1 point
ReplyDelete.8 (B) = The topic sentence restates the question and makes the writer's position clear. It engages the reader.
Supporting Details:2 points
1.6 (B) The writer chooses vivid details and examples from the reading or real life. The support shows, explains or proves the writer's position while engaging the reader. The reader feels confident in the writer's argument.
Organization & Unity: 1 point
5(D) = The paragraph may occassionally wander off topic. The writer may repeat ideas unnecessarily. The paragraph is not organized in a logical, efficient manner.
Conclusion: 1 point (
8 (B) = The conclusion recaps the topic sentence and summarizes the evidence, without repeating it word-for-word. It satisfies the reader's curiosity about the topic and allows her to answer the "so what?" question.
Total=3.7
The best part about these paragraphs is... Your understanding of both sides towards the act of killing such as your example of the the army saving its nation compare to the fathers killing.
These paragraphs could be improve if the writter fixed a few grammar mistakes and work to created a better sentence structure in his paragraphs.
Over all shows creativity to enhance his meaning.